It’s fast and easy to start writing about what we know best. Ourselves.
“[Company name] provides our clients with the following
services…”
“We would love to work on this
project.”
“Our mission at [company name] is to help our clients.”
There’s nothing errant about these statements, but sometimes we can make them more
personal and direct by focusing on the client, their issues, and how their
business will improve with our help.
Consider the increased impact of:
“You mentioned the importance
of xyz to your project. Your
concerns will be addressed through….”
“Your project is an exciting
one. We would love to help you meet your project goals.”
“Thank you for your consideration.”
A former supervisor of mine taught me an interesting exercise. Each time I wrote a proposal, we circled statements
that started with mention of our firm,
by name, or with a pronoun such as “we”. It was amazing how quickly these instances
accrued when we didn’t pay attention.
Talking about yourself first and frequently is not wrong, but
recognizing when you do it gives you the opportunity to make your document more
relevant and personal for your reader.
Help your client see that it’s not about you. Instead, it’s very much
about them.